Week of 2/9

This week Taylor and I presented our 4-minute rough cut.  The class feedback really helped us, and with the list we made we will refine our edit.  I think that the class opinions on the opening shot of the protagonist bound up helped us a lot because I could not really settle on whether I liked it or not.  I think that I liked the shot, but that the dialogue in a further section needs to be re-vamped.  When the girl says that she has the most average life, "happy even," it may give away our plot too easily.  I had this thought when I read the script, but I wasn't sure if it was just me.  Luckily, the class feedback gave us another approach to the narrative, and I think that we will take that line out.  It also helped us to talk about shot choices during the couple's dinner conversation.  I think that including the wide shot of them across from each other at the table would be good, but we may have to color correct it to match the other close ups with the added gel.  I actually had the wide shot in the beginning of the scene as an establishing shot, but we took it out during editing.  We will go back through this scene and see where it would be most effective, whether that be at the beginning as before or after the couple's argument to establish the far space between them.  After we fix these problems, we want to go through and add some sound and foley in.  I want to find music for the opening during the title.  I also want to work on editing the title a bit more, because I really like working with experimental film and I think that small piece has potential to add a lot to the opening of the film.  This week during our in-class editing, we will fix the class suggestions, possibly add music and foley, and then we will begin to cut the next scene.  So far, everything is running smoothly and we will see what we can get done during our class time.